Monday, August 15, 2011

Raking Ground ..... please comment / critique?

Very descriptive poem. When you read it, you can see the tree and the vivid coloring of the leaf, you can feel the cold air of winter on your face, and you can hear the crunching bones. I like this very much. Also, you have no spelling mistakes that I can see. If you're going for a haiku, the rhythm is nearly perfect, except that the last line has four syllables when it should have five. I know how difficult it is to get the syllables to amount to the right number and still say what you want it to say, I've written a lot of poems with a strict syllabic rhythm format. Keep writing!

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